pale-face reunion
my brother smokes like mouth-to-mouth
regulatory deadline for
not ok
overweight mercy rule
but saving
embraced her
father believes
Naomi's lung
is European
whereas I
walk soup
conventions of the sea
familiar objects
my captive audience
lies still
Nice poem! Sharp energy. No-snag juxtaposition. Ending, landed. Love the last movement: whereas I // walk soup/ conventions of the sea/ familiar objects...." Works for me.
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ReplyDeleteThank you very much! Strange and nice to see someone else deconstruct my poem - I'm glad you like it.
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