5.03.2005

Writing Workshop Feedback in the Voice of Randy Jackson

Yo! Yo, yo, dog. Check it out. Check—Check this out. Yo. This poem is amazing, man. I mean, you've had your moments this semester that were kind of [makes hand gestures], but you really pulled it out here. You know, and you come in here every week and you just—you know who you are and your poems reflect that. I would buy this poem if you read it to me like that, man—it's that good, yo. It's a little pitchy in places, but you cleared up the voice by the end. Yo, dog, you been in the dog pound since the beginning, you know, but this piece puts you at the head of the pack.

9 comments:

  1. For me, it was just aight. But you know, you did your thing. You worked it out.

    Randy is SO the new Paula.

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  2. One of my best friends just finished a demo for Randy Jackson. He's sending it over this week.

    Odd, but true.

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  3. Charles, you kill me! That is too funny.

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  4. Oh, this is hilarious. I would love it if someone said this to me in workshop, just like this.

    Simon: That sounds like something I could have heard at any open mic reading in America. I could go to any wedding reception in the country and hear something as good as in a best man speech. And that's not what this workshop is all about.

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  5. Yep, lots of dog pound talk. "You worked it out, you did your thing, yo. It was ah-ite."

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  6. Em, more Simon: "Was that poetry? Your language is flat and your line breaks are kindergarten. For a minute, I thought I stumbled into a Texas Karaoke bar. You're in over your head. Go home."

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  7. *Oliver blows coffee out of his nose all over the computer screen*

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  8. Charles, Em, all: this is too funny. Thanks for this. I am stuck at work, waiting between patients, and this has really made me laugh out loud.
    (My nurse loved it too, and she doesn't even watch AI!)

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